he is 10.
here goes:
Going to the beach
I went to the beach on a windy day
BUt the colour had died. the magic was grey.
The tide had paused, but the wind still blew.
Inside me the anger grew and grew.
Then, when i was fit to burst,
I had not seen the very worst.
The dark swept over and covered the sea.
The only person there was me.
Above my head, a monochrome sky.
I lowered my head, and started to cry.
[proud mummy emoticon]
what do you think??? he values the mn opinion!
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belcantwait · 23/06/2009 16:57
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